Don’t show emotion│excerpt of a story I’ll never finish

Don’t show emotion│excerpt of a story I’ll never finish

A few months ago, I had to write a sci-fi story for my French class, I got graded on it but I didn’t think too much of it. This was obviously written in French but I decided to rewrite a bit in English! I really enjoy reading snippets of stories on other people’s blogs and thought it would be fun to try it myself. So here ya go! Oh and I’m aware it doesn’t make much sense, that’s the point.


Lissa sighed. Another school year, another slow and painful school year. Slowly she staggered down the stairs.

‘Ah, finally! C’mon you’re going to be late!’

‘Yeah I’m aware, coming mum…’ she mumbled whilst pouring milk next to her bowl of cereal.

Twenty minutes later she was at school. She was one of the few students actually living with her mum. Most children grow up in the orphanages. Well, after being created in the laboratory.

‘Turn to the page 394. So who can tell me when the modern revolution started? No one? Really?’ Mr Schmidt sighed. ‘This will be in the test next week, please learn all the dat….’ Someone knocked on the door. A blond haired guy came into the class.

‘Wait…I know him!’ Lissa thought. ‘No! What am I saying, I can’t think that!’ She turned bright red even imagining what people would say if they saw. ‘No, I really need to concentrate!’

He smirked whilst looking around the class, his gaze stopped a few seconds on Lissa but luckily nobody noticed.

‘Mr. Clark will you please stop looking at the students, you know how disrespectful it is! Now, please have a seat.’

Nothing eventful happened after that but Lissa couldn’t get this mysterious boy out of her head. His hair…looked familiar but she couldn’t figure why! The young girl was sure that she had never met him before, it’s impossible. She slowly made her way down the stairs of her school when he approached her.

‘Here’s my favourite person from this place!’

She just stared at him, how could he ever say something like that? It’s illegal!

“shhhh, what the HELL do you want from me’ she hissed after making sure nobody was looking.

He shrugged. ’Trying to make conversation!’

‘Are you trying to get us killed?!’

He rolled his eyes ‘oh..yeah, right we live with these stupid rules, how can I forget that life is hell?’ he smirked.

Lissa couldn’t believe her ears. ‘Yeah well maybe YOU don’t like them but I, count on following them and not getting myself killed.’

‘Oh, I had higher hopes for you, thought you were maybe different than all these idiots. You were showing your emotions when I walked in and for someone that wants to follow the rules, that’s not very good ay?’

He was right, she did make the mistake, but she couldn’t let anyone know. Her face went blank, showing no emotion, as if she were dead, well the way she was supposed to look all the time since her birth.

‘No. That was a mistake and it won’t happen again. I was tired and not concentrating.’

‘Oh sorry missy, guess you really are like all the others.’

Ouch. That hurt. Lissa knew it wasn’t true and somehow had the feeling that he knew too. No! Stop thinking, people will notice! Her face went blank again.

‘Well I don’t have anything to say to you anymore, have a nice day and bye.’

She left in a hurry before her face betrayed her again.

‘My name’s Adrian by the way’ he shouted.

Adrian. Adrian. Adrian. She knew that name but why?


And voila! This is a bit of a test post as I won’t be writing a lot of these. I thought it would be something different for once. What do you think?

XOXO, Rosie <3

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10 Comments

  1. 3rd April 2018 / 11:41 am

    this was so well written and very interesting! great post, rosie <3 x

    • 3rd April 2018 / 11:42 am

      Thank you so much! It’s my first time trying so I’m not too sure but that’s really kind of you! xx

  2. Kristi
    3rd April 2018 / 8:57 pm

    Very interesting! You are a good writer… I totally want to know what happens next now! More please 😊

    • 4th April 2018 / 1:36 pm

      Hahaha thanks! Yes I’ve got a plot twist in mind 🙂 xx

  3. 4th April 2018 / 3:03 am

    This is an amazing story! It’s so well written. ❤
    ~Emily xo

    • 4th April 2018 / 1:36 pm

      Thank you so much Emily! xx

  4. 4th April 2018 / 7:16 am

    This is amazing Rosie! Loved it so much! You should continue writing!

    • 4th April 2018 / 1:37 pm

      Thank you so much! Yes, it was really fun to write, I’ve got a small plot twist in mind as well 🙂 xx

  5. 17th April 2018 / 6:57 pm

    Wowow this is really good! I am very, very intrigued…

    • 18th April 2018 / 6:28 pm

      Aww haha thank you so much! I’m currently thinking of a plot twist 🙂 xx

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